Thursday, July 20, 2017

Make the Villain a Hero Challenge: "The Haunting Flashbacks" -- by Shine

We have another new member of Modern Bard this time! Everyone welcome Shine and let her know what you think of her Loki fan fiction story :)

The Haunting Flashbacks
By Shine
(A Loki Fanfiction)

Dark Asgardian dungeons with only dim lights for lighting. A tall male with very pale skin, dark black hair, emerald green eyes, and an outfit of green, little brown, and black, stood behind the gold force field light. No living soul could touch it. The male was Loki. It felt very strange to have a prince in the dungeons with deadly villains, but no one knew the truth of Loki, because Loki wasn't open to speak of it. All Loki knew was everyone in the palace hated him. Including the Frost Giants.
            Born as a Laufeyson.
            Adopted as an Odinson.
            None of it matters to him anymore. He was a nobody to everyone. Everyone wanted him dead. Only Loki knew the truth. Yes, a painful truth that haunted him for many years. Those haunted horrors would only come out as nightmares, flashbacks, PTSD, or just by thinking about without realizing it, or a slightest sound that sounded like the deadly tortures of the Abyss can trigger his thoughts. The chains triggered Loki everytime he goes to Odin. Which now, Loki's mind thinks it's Thanos. One time, he thought a Einherjar guard was the Other, and he tried pulling the chains. Everyone in the palace called him a MAD PSYCHO.
            Not once he forgave Odin.
            He hated Laufey from the beginning.
            Not once he forgave Thor and Thor's friends with death threats.
            All he wanted was Frigga to love him.
            Though, Loki would be released from the dungeons sometime soon. He was looking forward to locking himself in his room or finding a new place to live in, but he never knew his freedom would be something else. Until the day of Dark Elves killing Asgardians. The day he almost died from saving Thor's life from death.
            'If you betray me, I'll kill you.' The death threats echoed in Loki's mind as he was being freed to only help Thor on a mission. 'Your birthright was to die!' Odin's booming voice echoed in Loki's mind. It was a very dangerous escape from Asgard with Thor and Jane. The Warriors were keeping the Einherjar guards busy, as well as killing the dark elves.
            Loki kept himself from thinking about the Abyss and made him so madly different from others. But everything reminded him all the tortures, the mind controls, the brainwashing, the bloody whipping, the painful kicks from the Chitauri, the nightly tauntings from the Other, and the horrors of dead bodies laid by the Gallows of Death. Loki remembered every single one. He remembered all the warnings from Thanos. 'Those who fail my orders, will die in front of everyone! Prisoners will be forced to watch their cellmates die!' Those death sentence words haunted Loki forever. It seems that only the nightmares bring back the unwanted memories.
            Bullets hit the ship, causing Loki to snap out of it. He had no idea how long his mind wandered off at the time like this. Plus Thor's rage flying, making the ship go in different directions, crashing into things, just to escape from Asgard. The rest of the escape plan was to jump on the Skiff (a flying Asgardian boat) and fly to a secret pathway. Fandral seemed to keep the Einherjar guards busy by knocking them out.
            Taking the stirring stick thingy, Loki guided the Skiff towards the secret pathway. Which it was inside the mountain. Thor had a very nervous feeling that his brother was trying to crash into the mountain, not realizing that the secret pathway was in front of him.
            "LOKI!" Thor yelled, not liking how the Skiff was picking up speed.
            "If it were easy, anyone would do it." Loki said, trying to concentrate.
            "ARE YOU MAD?!" Thor shouted, shielding Jane Foster, his beloved girlfriend.
            "Possibly." Loki replied as they were now going through the mountain.
            Once on the other side, Loki said, "TA DA!"
            The Land of Dark Elves is where they were. A deadly, dark place to be in. Loki knew that, somehow, Thor was behind this idea of going to a place where Odin forbids any Asgardian to be in. And here Loki thought Thor's trip to Jotunheim was horrible enough. Kill the dark elves and get back to Asgard was Loki's silent plan as he parked the Skiff. 'Stupid chain cuffs! I hate these!' Loki thought angrily as the threesome walked up on the steep mountain of rocks and dirt.
            Again, Loki tried so hurt not to think about the darkness reminding him of the Abyss, but it was very difficult for him. He couldn't run from it or run off to hide. The sharp rocks reminded him of the Other always hiding at the rocks, waiting to strike his prisoners. Mainly the dungeons part and Thanos’ throne room. The chains. Always chains. Snapping out of his mind, Loki reached the top of the mountain with Thor and Jane behind Thor. The army of dark elves were on the bottom, next to the huge, ugly, ship. He had to get these chain cuffs off before he started losing it mentally.
            Once the chain cuffs were off, the battle begun. Though, Jane stayed on the mountain, so she was safe, but the brothers were in battle. While Thor was busy hammering the dark elves, Loki took care of the other dark elves with his sharp dagger blade. He stabbed them in every vital part of the bodies he could locate without getting hit by them. Just as he thought he was done, something wasn't right. The giant elf wasn't here. He looked towards the flying rocks and saw that Thor was getting a heap of beatings from a giant elf named Kurse. And he thought Malekith was deadly enough.
            As Loki snuck up behind the monster, he recognized him from the dungeons. The monster had tusks and war paint on as Loki recalled. Loki picked up the monster's sword and stabbed it through the back and towards the chest. There was one mistake Loki made and he didn't realize it until the monster picked him up and shoved the blade through Loki's middle chest. The extreme pain triggered his thoughts about the whippings from the Other. Thanos’ strict order of beating their prisoners. The horrible flashback was disturbed when he was shoved on the hard ground.
            Kurse shoved Loki on the hard ground before he disappeared into the wormhole. Thanks to the black haired Asgardian for setting it off. Once the giant monster was gone, Thor rushed to Loki's side. Loki had already lost consciousness, suffered from blood lost, but not enough to kill him, and was in a coma by the time Thor had brought his brother back to the Asgardian healing room.
            No one, not even Thor, would know when their Hero, Loki, would awaken from the coma. Only time will tell.
            The only good thing about this strange coma is that the dark, horror triggers of the Abyss couldn't bother Loki's mind.

Copyright 2017 by Shine


  1. Poor Loki. I really liked getting to see some of his inner perspective in this story on what he was going through during the events of Dark World. Good job! And welcome to Modern Bard :)

    1. Thanks! I would like to thank Abigail Leskey for recommending your blog about this "Making The Villain A Hero" challenge.

      From, Shine

      P.S. This is my RP/Chat google account. It's still Shine speaking here.

  2. Welcome to our midst!
    Yes, Loki has a tough time of it. It would seem to me that you have very well portrayed his perception of the events.

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  4. I have always enjoyed books/stories with Loki in them, and this was a good one! I also really liked the cover!

    1. I also love reading stories with Loki in them!

      Thanks, Anne!

  5. I was very excited when I saw that you'd joined the challenge! Loki's point of view was interesting and sad. And I liked that Frigga didn't die.

    1. Yes, it was very interesting without death in the family. Yes, it was sad that not one Asgardian took the time to help him and get everything situated.


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